Friday, 7 March 2014

My explanation

1 comment:

  1. Firstly, well done for completing this within the deadline. Your title makes it clear what I will read about. Your paragraphs were organised well. You did not need to start with a questions, I should have seena topic sentence to elad me into the main idea. There was good flow between paragraphs. Your conclusion was good.I would liked to have seen more causal and time connectives used. Don't forget to proof read for punctuation.