Friday, 21 March 2014

Davin's 100 WC Week 26

Once upon a time there lived a boy called Sam and a girl called Lizzie. One day they were outside lying on their backs looking at the clouds. ‘’Wow can you see that train ‘’ Said Sam.’’yes “ Said lizzie can you see that horse’’said Lizzie ‘’yes‘’ said sam .But as soon as they were just about to fall asleep the rain poured down on them so they ran inside. The rain didn’t stop for days. But when the rain stopped they ran outside sam looked up.‘’look up! what can you see’’said sam. ‘’A Demon’’said Lizzie.And in one second they were swept up and never seen again.

By Davin.


  1. I liked your idea of the story but did you proof read it? Seems like it has a couple of mistakes. I think you can improve it by using richer words.

  2. I loved the way you turned this story round from a gentle and pretty scene to a very scary story. Very good writing indeed.