Thursday, 13 March 2014

Sophie's 100 WC #25

The robbery  


Once there was a girl that lived in the city she was five years old and loved girl scout biscuits. She always asked if she could have some she ran to the jar but when she lifted the lid it was empty she cried, then she heard her dad shouting she went to him he said that the TV was gone, then her mum was mumbling they came to her Diamond wedding ring was no where to be seen they called the cops immediately they knew who stole it was the mystery maker they know where he lives, the black house door they shooted down the door and put him in jail.

1 comment:

  1. Oh dear, what a sad story Sophie; Robberies can be so heartbreaking for the poor victims. It sounds though like you made sure the robber got what he deserved? I hope the family got their possessions back?
    One thing which helps your readers though, is if you are careful to include sensible punctuation - a few well-placed full stops can actually help your story flow.
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.

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